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Business Writing? An example, - " Take Charge, & Go green! "

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Business Writing? An example, - " Take Charge, & Go green! "

Interested in Business Writing? Following is an true Example from my business:

Link to the Letter

Personal Notes: trying express everything Not more than 150 words, * thats why TOFEL & IELTS ask so!

Writing a business letter is, always, not an easy job. Can not remember how many times this letter had been edited,

In business, a short letter may make clients list longer, so, almost like "building a sword", in the past time for a solider.

Today, people hates "Tele-marketing" the cost-saving tool has turned people down.

So old business method comes back,  "keep it short", use possible less, and shorter words as you can...

this reminds me of Don, and ...he said, "the keys of writing down any ideas are clear, short, true to the fact,

and concise as well."

Same as it is in a format of e-mail, try to give a few links that offers more info, references, and it's useful for your readers.

Same as in the Faxes. Lenthy sentences should be avoided.

Keeping the letter not more than 10 lines, or less than five paragraphes, and try to keep within 150-180 words?

People are now impatient, and  some of them do not read more than 2-3 minutes.

Luckily, in northern America, people don't really care about formailities, and "too good writings",

....rather, but prefer making good sence.


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When finish, give a second readinds, or read alaud to yourself, then choose "Action Verbs" to give a vivid and strong title!

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一语,

" Take Charge, & Go green! "

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May 18, 2010


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12%, effective May 01, Ontario. Businesses and homes will see increase on hydro bill by "Time of use"  rate @ 0.099 / kWh, at "Peak Hours", "Go Green" is one of your options, stabilizing cost, free from the increase.
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The "Market price program" is Green, protective, the variable true cost for high volume users, indexed on www.ieso.ca Avg. 2010  is 0.0340 kWh. You may enjoy the true cost, or adjust your investment in green energy, budget and to build better future.
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"Choose green, take charge! "
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Lei, John. Zhang
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Electricity Retailer Licence No: ER-2005-0314
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Contractor No: 263453

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* St. Catharine, Hamilton, Burlington, Oakville, Mississauga, Toronto


905 802 5896 ( Cell ) 905 333 8359 ( Fax ) ) E) v2 w6 U) p# M- @( D
E-mail: john.application.2009@gmail.com


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Hope more readers find it usefull!

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1 E5 v8 e. t4 b; b$ p( DThanks, for commenting, Yes, it is a true case. - }/ t9 J' k' |. Y
Hope more readers may like it, and find it usefull!
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